Would you want to read more from this?

I realize this is probably a fantasy novel, but you are going to totally overwhelm your reader with those names. Gachi, Eyzieo, and Chi are either too hard to pronounce or too lush. However, i like Layla and Kiren. Also, the snake sentence is "He seen a little girl getting ganged on by snakes". This is supposed to be a serious event if he's going to have to fight snakes, it should be much more descriptive, and in its own paragraph probably. Besides some of the grammatical and spelling errors, it's good. It just needs some tightening up, that's all. :)